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何钢发表于 2006-5-11 19:40

五月跟何钢学高分作文，你来写我来改

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 大家好。考过雅思的同学都有这样的体会：雅思难，难在写作。至于具体难在什么地方，不同同学有不同难处。有的同学是看不懂题目；有的同学是自以为懂，洋洋洒洒而离题万里；有的同学是找不到合适的英语表达；而有的同学是自以为用词精彩句子结构复杂而考官觉得难以理解。
 为了帮助大家提高雅思写作水平，我整理了一下最近的考题（06年3至4月留学类）。大家可以写一下。我会挑一些同学的文章进行点评。希望通过这样的方式，大家的作文可以越来越接近雅思作文高分的要求。 
大家可以直接在这里发表自己的作文，也可以通过无忧雅思论坛发表自己的作文。
斑竹提示：如果您的作文不希望其他人看到，可以使用定员贴，然后在对话框中输入“何钢” 
 2006年3月11日
In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? Give reasons and make some suggestions. 
 2006年3月18日
Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students how to judge right and wrong and how to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 
 2006年3月25日
Long distance flight uses more fuel than car and brings pollution to the environment. We should discourage non-essential flight rather than limit the use of car. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 
 2006年4月8日
Space travel to the moon is considered as “a step of mankind.” But some people think that space travel has made little difference on people’s lives today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 
 2006年4月22日
Some people consider that history is of little or no use to us. Others believe that studying history helps us to know the present. Discuss these views and give your own opinion. 
 2006年4月29日
Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. business, companies). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

fvcku 发表于 2006-5-11 19:45

sofa, and thx
its damn good!
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senlovepang 发表于 2006-5-11 20:42

谢谢何刚老师老师，您的作文单项班有什么最近开课的么

dionxia 发表于 2006-5-11 21:04

thanks!!

robin_mengx 发表于 2006-5-11 21:18

谢谢何老师，作文题一般都考什么内容，有重复吗？

WLW56 发表于 2006-5-11 23:44

谢谢老师

sprite112 发表于 2006-5-12 00:36

TOPIC：Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. business, companies). Discuss both views and give your opinion.<o:p></o:p>
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Who should be responsible for the expenditure of national athletes has been brought to the spotlight recently. Some maintain that the government should take the responsibility, whereas others are confident that these people will be in better condition under the support of non-government institutions. Here, I will discuss the two opposing views in the following.
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Those who want the government to give a hand to sports people believe that the money will give the latter a sense of pride in being athletes of his or her country. Sometimes this sense will result in a better performance in games. Besides, as to the government, it can manage theses people closely while preventing the bribery things on a large extent, which maybe very common under the management of some businessman in that the purpose of them is to make money for themselves.
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Conversely, other people argue that non-government organizations will lead a broader way to both companies and sportsmen in that the latter has wider choices and the cooperation will be more effective. Take a football team as an example, it can choose sponsorship to meet its own demands among thousands of companies. Moreover, companies have much more experience than the government in business, thus they know how to use their money efficiently.
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In conclusion, it’s hard to say which side is definitely right or wrong. Maybe we could let the government to support the majority of those people and teams while giving some well-organized companies the right to hold their own sports club.
 
麻烦何老师改一下，非常感谢！！

christinefox 发表于 2006-5-12 01:14

bump!

lexmark 发表于 2006-5-12 02:47

Topic: 
sports and entertainment personalities have higher value than professional workers like doctor, nurse and teacher in some society ,why this happened in some society and do you think it is good or bad development. 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>There is no doubt that in many countries that sports and entertainment personalities have higher value than professional workers, such as doctor, nurse and teacher, but some people argued that it was a bad development for that country. The following essay outlines why I agree with that sports and entertainment personalities have higher value than professional workers are the bad development.<o:p></o:p>
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left> 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>To begin with, professional workers are contributing more than sports and entertainment personalities in daily life. By this I mean, professional works do more things for the people. The society can’t keep running without them.<o:p></o:p>
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left> 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>Another point to bear in mind is that sports and entertainment personalities has less knowledge than professional works. In other words, professional works need minimum degree or certifications, whereas to be a sports or entertainment personality does not need any academic certificate.<o:p></o:p>
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left> 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>However, it cannot be denied that sports and entertainment personalities also important to people. That is to say, sports and entertainment personalities bring people lots of fun. People really enjoyed themselves when they watch sports matches and entertainment programmers. When sports and entertainment personalities win the world match, they will benefit the whole country.<o:p></o:p>
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left> 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>To sum up, although it is true that sports and entertainment personalities also important to people, but I still confirm that sports and entertainment personalities have higher value than professional workers are the bad development as professional workers are contributing more than sports and entertainment personalities in daily life and they have more knowledge than sports and entertainment personalities.
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left> 
<P 0cm -52.6pt 0pt 17.85pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-para-margin-right: -5.01gd; mso-para-margin-left: 17.85pt" align=left>谢谢了！<o:p></o:p>
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carmensisi 发表于 2006-5-12 06:19

移民类的考生，请何老师指导！
topic:Computer games are popular among children, no matter what their nationalities and age are parents think they bring less educational influence but harmful effects on children, give your opinion on this topic.<o:p></o:p>
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My balance will certainly tip for negative influence outweighs educational effects which computer games do towards children. Computer games are harmful to adolescents’ physical and mental health, weaken the enthusiastic of study, furthermore, and incline to make them far away from the society life. The above are why there has been a growing body of opinion in favor of suppressing computer games.<o:p></o:p>
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Of crucial importance, in my opinion, computer games cost a great deal of time instead of rest. The games play tremendous harm to physical health, for example, youngsters have to sit straightly or keep same post before the screens, as well as stare on them which last for long eye content. In addition, the virtual world which children are fond of, enlarges sex, violence, wars, fights, would lead to psychological problems.<o:p></o:p>
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Another vital hurt would be children give up studying, time on which is spent on games as their preferable choice. Education is not essential task to accomplish for children whose mind has been involved in games.<o:p></o:p>
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Throughout playing games, adolescents are full of confidence to win but lose it to get along with peers, for them lacking of communication in reality society in normal languages. That is, exactly to say, they would become social misfits, who are alien without social skills.<o:p></o:p>
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Admittedly, on the opposite statement, computer games practice children’s reaction ability, whether they can shift swiftly. However, if they addict deeply in computer games, they would be abandoned by public. Therefore, the above opinion might be somewhat convincing to some young people, in principle, those are your outcomes if you ignore them.<o:p></o:p>

snow_snow 发表于 2006-5-12 07:01

我的神呀，何老师真是厉害，请问会给5.20考试的同学什么建议呢？

张小手 发表于 2006-5-12 07:03

谢谢何刚老师,我听过您的课,启发很大[em07]

lavender0617 发表于 2006-5-12 07:27

真是如逢甘露啊谢谢何老师
Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The ideal that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are responsible for bringing the children up <o:p></o:p>
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Human, as one of the spices in the world, never fail to engage in the activities of rearing their next generation by means of building up families. And fatherhood, reported by the most sophisticated socialists, is as crucial as motherhood in this basic union of the society.<o:p></o:p>
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In recent decades, the number of single mother family increased dramatically since more and more women believed that having baby and bringing them up was the task which was only related to themselves. And gradually, the negative effect exerted on the new generation has become increasingly obvious which lead to a social problem deserving public concerned.<o:p></o:p>
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Undeniably, men has the same rights as women in deciding whether or not to have babies, since this is a task involved two individuals even though it is woman who has baby in her body while pregnant. In another word, having baby is the basic rights for each individual.<o:p></o:p>
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Additionally, no one is able to enjoy any rights without taking certain responsibilities. The father plays a significant role in rearing child. They may never be good at taking care of small age child but the love form him could never be replaced in any circumstance. Furthermore, the lack of father in the childhood may give rise to a failure in the development of personality since in the process of education certain topics would better be presented by the father other than mother. For instance father plays an essential part in the growing up of the youth by helping boys behaving manly and offering their appreciation to girls in order to help them obtaining self confidence.<o:p></o:p>
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All in all, a typical family with two parents in which man and woman share their responsibilities will continue be the mainstream of our society. <o:p></o:p>
293/40mins <o:p></o:p>

lily8716 发表于 2006-5-12 16:15

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robin_mengx 发表于 2006-5-12 16:47

2006年3月11日In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. are leaving school 如何理解？是面临毕业还是中途退学？请教何老师及各位

Jungkyeong 发表于 2006-5-12 18:28

先占个地儿！作文是老大难啊~~~[em01]

卓儿irene 发表于 2006-5-12 21:47

何老师真是太好啦！！！
学术类的学生！！7月8号就要考拉，帮忙指点指点把！！
topic:long distance flight uses more fuel than car and brings pollution to the environment .We should discourage non-essential flight rather than limit the use of car.To what extent do you agree or disagree？（06.3.25)
If you are the people who are sensitive to the superheated social issues, you certainly find out that fuel waste and environment pollution is of prevalence.Observing the issue that long distance flight uses more fuel and make pollution,some scientist who are engaging in those regarding fields express their urgent concerns that encourage the use of car instead of non-essential flight.Yet,in my opinion.I can not agree with then absolutely.
The plane as a kind of transport tool is a sign of development of our society culture and technology.If you support this view that in many case,travelling by car are better than flights,only for the latter will use more fuel and have pollution.Then,sooner or later,you will find bike better than car,and then,next step,you must say that walk which only use our feet is the best choice for that do not rely on fuel and no pollution to environment.
At that time,what will happen？we will go back to the Stone Age,when our shoes are made from grass,our clothes are animal skins,our trousers are those big leaves.All of that are only for save fuel and reduce pollution, because every industries will use fuel and bring pollution like waste gas, waste water,and so on.But,is this way of the life that we actually want?
Of course,saving fuel and protecting environment are very crucial problems.I thought we should pay more attention on a new engine which can reduce the fuel use on flight and decrease the pollution.If we do more research on this aspect,we either develop our technology or resolve our problem.On the other hand,we also can discovery some new fuel such as solar power,wind power,nuclear energy which instead of those fossil fuel like coal,oil,gas.
In a sentence,I hope,at the same time,we resolve our difficulties in fuel and pollution,we aslo develop our technology,not go back.
Q:文章是不是跑题了？用不用说“limit the use of car”?

financeboy1 发表于 2006-5-12 22:17

何老师挺忙的，不知道多久才能回复一个怀着热切之心的考生？

xkw8766 发表于 2006-5-12 23:19

Some people consider that history is of little or no use to us. Others believe that studying history helps us to know the present. Discuss these views and give your own opinion. 
老师您好，您就拿我的当反面教材，我不介意。但是请您提出一些修改意见，十分感谢！！！！！！

The discussion of education is always eternity and classic .Some people think that there is no need to teach students history any more .Beyond all doubt,this opinion shows a very big challengeto the schools and people who think that how emphasize the importance of the history is never excessively .penrsonally , Ibelieve that both their views have the reasonable parts.

It is history that has Countless examples to teach Posterity ,which is often better to use the boring theories.First ,when people have some problems or feel puzzled, we can usually find out afew samilar situations form history. seeing and thinking whether the ancient people rae right or wrong can give us Inspires. Second, it goes without saying that a nation , regardless owning more than 5000 years of history or just having built up 300 years ,always irrigate the patriotism by teaching history.In order to ask the youth to dedicate for their country,requesting them to do as their ancestors did is a valid way.

Onthe other hand ,the development of techology has profound impact on our lives .therefore,To obtain more worthy knowledge, study the history is not enough.The new problems that cannot find an answer from the history has tremendous growed more than any time before.So we need to make use the knowledge of other realms to solve problems.Moreover,it cannot be denied that it is really awaste of time for the students who do not like studying history.We can imagine that they may leran almost nothing in the history class without interests .

In conclusion ,to let the students control more knowledge,history is a necessary way.Considering about the efficiency,it is not fit for all contemporaries.Hence I am convinced that this course can only be plentily provided to the specialists .<

shixuan 发表于 2006-5-13 04:41

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cntjwj 发表于 2006-5-13 09:18

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Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. business, companies). Discuss both views and give your opinion.<o:p></o:p>
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As the development of our country’s sports industry, the costs of the national sports teams and individuals go up quickly. Gradually, whether these costs should be paid by our government exclusively becomes a question. Some people assert that the government doesn’t have the obligation to support the teams and individuals, while others maintain that support from the government is necessary.<o:p></o:p>
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Indeed, funds form non-government sources, such as businesses and companies can encourage players to do better jobs to some extent. Moreover, enough money can assure the sports players a better life and let them concentrate on trainings. However, more often than not, funds from such sources are not that stable. Players can get enough financial support only under the condition that they are in good shape and have no reason to lose their leads in their fields. Once they don’t justice themselves in some important matches, they may become much less attractive to those companies and the financial support will shrink rapidly. To make things worse, this situation in turn can have a rather bad affect on our players. <o:p></o:p>
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Even if sufficient financial support is offered in time, those sponsors can hamper the further development of the sports players. The most direct reason is that the companies need to make money by investing on their teams of individuals. Consequently, large amount of the players’ time was engaged in various kinds of commercial activities. <o:p></o:p>
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However, when it comes to the funds form the government, things become much simpler. As a matter of fact, the sole target of the government is to stimulate the players to win more matches. In addition, from the angle of the players, they made a lot of sacrifice for their motherland in order to become competitive in their fields. For instance, they spent most of their spare time to practice and couldn’t have enough time for further studies.<o:p></o:p>
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Thus, it is desirable for the players to get funds from their governments. In the mean time, funds from other sources should be introduced conservatively. Only in this way, can our sports players be best protected and make better results.
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rebecca_yuan 发表于 2006-5-14 00:39

老师，我想问一下3月 11号的文章该从什么角度写？我觉得这个文章好难，我刚写了一下，怎么看都觉得写得像小学生作文~~~[em03][em03][em03]

no_silent 发表于 2006-5-14 05:52

11楼的同胞，我也是5.20号考，西安

何刚老师，有没有什么预测啊？

ycmltl 发表于 2006-5-14 07:22

我说何老师啊，您要是早点弄这个点评贴多好啊，我20号就考了：（

sissylina 发表于 2006-5-14 20:37

5.13 essay: Housing shortage in big cities could cause severe consequence, only government action can solve this problem. To what extent you agree or disagree.....Since economic boost promoting cities’ development, recent years witness the great changes. One of the prominent differences is the emergence of new buildings. However, citizens still confront with housing shortage. Addressing severe consequences going with this issue, such as negative mood even social unrest have already been put on to the agenda. It is no doubt that governments should be partially blamed for the problem and I believe that there are some other involved parties who ought to shoulder the responsibilities either.  Firstly, housing shortage is not because the lack of enough departments for citizens but because the inability for them to afford it. The old houses or departments have been demolished and people are asked to move out. If the homeless want to move back to the original communities, they usually have to pay a lot more for the new departments since the housing price has skyrocketed and seldom people can afford it. Though the government provides subsidies for the homeless, it is obvious far more than enough. Then those who suffer the loss of home feel unfair and resentful. If government can provide those for more financial supports, their burden will be greatly alleviated. As for the real estate agents, they should lower the unreasonable price to make salaried people get access to a comfortable home.  Secondly, the inconvenience is another reason for people no house to buy. As modernization, people tend to move out of the downtown. However, the construction of infrastructure cannot catch up with house building. For those people who cannot afford a well-located department, they have no choice but to move afar which means they will spend more time and money on the way, they have no time left for children and of course they will be more exhausted. Considering these, people are unwilling to buy a house in suburb even outskirt. All these call for the government to put the city plan on to the top priority. Comparing with development countries, public transportation in Chinese cities lag behind. For example, the government should do more for wide-spread and efficient subways. On the other hand, Employees should work out more caring policy to help release housing shortage. We know that in developed countries, companies can provide day care centers for those worked parents. What’s more, Can Chinese bosses say yes for a flexible working time to their employees, especially those who live in far away? As long as those inconveniences could be solved, people will feel free to buy a house though it is a little far.  To sum up, addressing housing shortage, it needs the cooperation of the government, real estate agents and employers. 谢谢何老师

xiaoqiangharry 发表于 2006-5-14 23:13

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落地的蓝月亮 发表于 2006-5-14 23:47

henhao

落地的蓝月亮 发表于 2006-5-14 23:48

henhao

waidozen 发表于 2006-5-15 00:24

好人哪。。。

senlovepang 发表于 2006-5-15 04:01

ur essay is very good , i appreciate it

jth188 发表于 2006-5-15 04:27

我7.22在北京考~不知道大家有没有好的建议!现在作文是我的老大难!谢谢大家!请何钢老师给我些建议!我上过你的课!见过您!!!谢谢!!!

susantingwang 发表于 2006-5-15 06:45

谢谢老师

jandv 发表于 2006-5-15 14:26

何刚老师,人好好啊

softsandy 发表于 2006-5-15 19:31

拜读中

Bobby_lee 发表于 2006-5-16 02:07

此贴甚好，何老师大公无私，此乃我等烤鸭之福音是也。

shulefish 发表于 2006-5-16 17:55

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enjoy2007 发表于 2006-5-16 19:06

[UserName=何钢]Topic: In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? Give some suggestions. (This is the topic in Ottawa April’s test, which instruction doesn’t mention reasons. Hence, I just write the problems and suggestions as following.)<span lang="ZH-CN" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-ansi-language: EN-CA;">请教如何快速构思论点论据? <span lang="ZH-CN" style="mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-ansi-language: EN-CA;">我老是在这花很多时间.Recently, the hot issue that young people fail to obtain jobs after completing their studies from colleges or universities has aroused wide concern. Many people have realized that youth unemployment has brought a lot of negative effects to the individual and the society. Before providing some suggestions towards this issue, I would like to explore the problems that youth unemployment causes. To begin with, young people may lose their enthusiasm of their career when they are unable to find a job. Many students have the ideal about their future career when they are in school. They weave their dream with hard studying. Moreover, they hope they can apply what they have learnt to a real workplace. However, they will feel frustrated when they cannot get any job after interviews, or even do not have interview opportunities. As a result, they will be disappointed and lose their strong interest in the future career.  Another problem caused by youth unemployment is the increasing number of crimes in our society. Without correctly guiding, some young people who do not have a job hang around streets and join the street gangs. In order to get money, they may involve in selling drugs, stealing, robbing and other crimes. According to a recent investigation, 90% of members of street gangs do not have a job after graduating from school.  Last but not least, youth unemployment is a waste of human resource. The young people who just graduate from school are full of spirit and energy. Furthermore, they are with fresh memory of knowledge and skills. If they have chance to contribute their talents on workplaces, both companies and our society would benefit from their efforts. Otherwise, it is a pity of wasting human resource. From above analysis, several effective measures must be taken urgently before things get worse. Firstly, government should provide services to help young people to improve their self-marketing skills, such as modifying resumes, cover letters, practicing job interviews. Secondly, schools should predict the market and tell students before they graduate. Meanwhile, teachers should encourage students to be persistent on their way of job searching. Finally, government should motivate employers give more job opportunities to the youth, including volunteer position. In conclusion, youth unemployment not only affects the individuals’ development, but also causes negative effects to our society. However, I believe the problems will be solved with our efforts. [/UserName]
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michaelman 发表于 2006-5-16 19:21

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pencil800pens 发表于 2006-5-16 22:38

Topic:  should the government gives the financial support to the sport term?Basic on the government has the responsibility to give financial rescue to the crisis area, so some people have a faulty understanding that the government should give grant to every aspect of the society, for instance, the sports term or individual athletes. It seems this opinion is reasonable, since some sports require expensive facilities which can not afford by terms or athletes. Meanwhile those sports people also need the stable income for living or shouldering their families.   However, in my pinion, the government should not be the volunteer of the bread owner which means the sports term should search the fund by them. Firstly, compared with homeless children and illness and poor people, the sports organization has the full ability to seek the money to feed themselves. For example, the sport meeting can benefit them by the charging of entrance fees from the audiences and the charging of broadcast right from the TV station. Secondly, it is the similar as singers who have considerable incomes if they achieve the audiences’ appreciate. The individual people can be sponsored, given that they have excellent performance in the professional field. To further illustrate this point, nowadays, some sports starts appear frequently on various advertisements and the earning is far enough for them to meet their needs, so it is no point that the government gives them any extra financial support.     To sum up, neither sports term nor individual people should address their financial problems by themselves. Meanwhile, if they are valuable, the public will be helpful to fix their problems. On the other hand, should the government waste the money to support them, if they are not popular which are judged by the public?
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myyan 发表于 2006-5-17 02:32

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