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cicik 发表于 2006-5-31 07:13

怎么构思呢？[em01][em09]

mygs2574 发表于 2006-5-31 20:59

还是去年暑假听的何钢老师的课呢!马上要考了心情有些紧张.这是五月的项目吗?:)不知道再发作文给您您还有时间看吗?哎,才看到~!~

pcliu 发表于 2006-6-1 01:02

我估计何刚老师根本不知道这个主题，他不象是那种说空话的呀？<a href="http://www.up2u我厂 p.com.cn/bbs"></a>

libralibra 发表于 2006-6-1 09:53

何老师什么时候才能来看看啊

兜兜里有糖 发表于 2006-6-1 18:11

开了这个帖子没见改过一篇，关了算了，那么多热切盼望你改的朋友们辛辛苦苦输入到电脑里，白输了[em03]

兜兜里有糖 发表于 2006-6-1 18:17

再回过头去把所有的帖子都看了一下，真的很过分，大家都那么感激你开了这个帖子，不知道你为什么就没有改过一篇，如果你很忙就不要在这开帖子，大家不要说谢谢了，考完了他都不会来改的，BS！骗人气的帖子！！！[em16]

pencil800pens 发表于 2006-6-1 19:31

既然老也等不到老师的批改,大家为什么不自己动手丰衣足食呢,把它看做是同学交流写作的一个平台.我们大家可以互相来修改语法和词的用法不当的地方,从中共同学习和进步.

libaidong 发表于 2006-6-2 13:32

In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? Give reasons and make some suggestions. The booming eduction in many country makes it possible that more and more students are accessible to higher education. with the incentimental graduates providing to the society, the limit vacancies are congested, which is impossible to hold so many Brains to lead to plenty of graduates unemployed.The rapid increase of youth unemployment might bring about significant induvidaul and social pressure.On the one hand, the unemployed young men are confronting with financial trouble. Without econonical resource, they have to rely on their parient, which can cause the complex family conflicts. Furthermore, they may develop mental problems due to the frustration and stress. To make it worse, they need to pay more money to get the treatment of psychological disorders. In addition, for the long term of unemployment, the graduates are not able to utilize their knowledge which they have obtained form college student. The disconnection of theory and practice has no mean not to forget the knowledge.On the other hand, the individaul influences can deduce the social dilemma.The government爄s facing爐o deal with the contradiction of the爀xcessive燘rain supply and the short Brain demand. otherwise, the idle young爌oeple might incline the social crimes because of their economic and psycological reasons. In order to sovle the complicated individual and social problems resulted form bulk of unemployment, the government爉ust conduct enough investment in the reaserch field, synthesize the current information and爓ork out 爐he爁easible爎egulations.

leo9398 发表于 2006-6-3 00:23

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Talvin 发表于 2006-6-3 03:59

听说有所谓的题库，是怎么回事呢？

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-3 06:17

[em02]顶

yjzxy2 发表于 2006-6-3 07:05

感谢和老师的教导！好好学习天天向上！[em01]

wjwdoreen 发表于 2006-6-3 07:17

There is a public debate recently whether censorship should exist in fashionable society.Some people hold that government should offer a free expression sourrounding to media.However,some one against it. As to me,I back up the latter opinion. There are three major reasons to support my view. First of all,if media was given freedom of opinion and expression, many fraud news would come to people's views. Last year, a jouralist wrote an unreal news so as to attract people . The essay said that an unusual cat can use telephone to listen songs when its master went to work. When the telephone bill reached, the host learned what had happened and had to pay 2000 yuan for it. The news was too amazing to be true, which causedsome people to explore it .Finally, they found the reporter combined two unrelated news. Moreover, news is widespread and have instruction function. Through news, people learn what have happened in the world.The existance of censorship will form a healthy circumstance which benefits to journalists who report news in earnest. And also, it can establish an aggressive social temper. The rules like a filtering machine that can leave litter outside and remain the useful subsentance. Worse still,as a result of people living condition improved , mass media sprung up days and nights.In order to restrict them, some standreds must be layout. Without checking, lots of violence and sexual picture will be filled with TVs. Adolescent may immune the actions displayed on televisions,which will lead to commit crimes. About two years ago, there was a video appeared online that a group of terroists were killing  an American. Soon the website was forced to withdraw it as it was too cruel. If the American didn't stop it, it would result in panic among Americans. In a word, news can not be reported before being examed just like people could not live in a disorder inner clock system. It will make people feel unsafty and uncomfortable. People need a clear ,true world instead of filling  with tricks and fraud information. News target is to enrich our spiritual life rather then give us confusions.
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hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-3 20:31

看来我也等不到了：（

vivihuo 发表于 2006-6-3 21:40

g'c................

xmissH 发表于 2006-6-4 00:30

good[em02]

家有菜花 发表于 2006-6-4 05:39

贴出来的作文写的都不错啊，何老师也是想鼓励大家多写吧，其实写的多了，自然就知道自己该怎么学了。

静影1015 发表于 2006-6-4 06:21

要写这么多字啊，毛都竖起来了！完了，我基础那么差看来半年是过不了雅思了！

Catherine0924 发表于 2006-6-4 09:24

哗。。。系米真咖？？

sunhuarong 发表于 2006-6-4 10:01

thanks......................

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-4 19:26

俺要考试了，何老师您就快来改改吧，等了好久好久了

billie1983 发表于 2006-6-4 20:20

谢谢何老师！！！！！！好人！！！！！！支持支持！！！！！

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-5 07:16

倒计时，还有5天考试

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-5 16:03

倒计时，还有四天

naturedream 发表于 2006-6-6 03:04

thx a lot!

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-6 06:55

5555555，老师不来，我也要受伤了

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-6 21:48

倒计时，还有三天！！！！

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-7 17:02

倒计时，还有两天

billie1983 发表于 2006-6-7 22:44

这到底是不是何老师发的帖子啊？怎么都没见到改过的文章呢？？？

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-8 00:00

不管谁发的，都该来改一下子文章了吧？？

cindy_shu 发表于 2006-6-8 00:03

Really good!

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-8 06:08

快就剩最后一天了

bivian_qi 发表于 2006-6-8 17:16

cheer up man~~~~~`````

sylove212 发表于 2006-6-8 17:20

老师好

xo10682 发表于 2006-6-8 19:53

斑竹提示：如果您的作文不希望其他人看到，可以使用定员贴，然后在对话框中输入“何钢” 请问什么是"定员贴"啊???????????

xo10682 发表于 2006-6-8 20:07

5月27号的考题:国际旅游的利弊.我是类考生,请老师指导 International travel,as a way of communitation for the other countries ,play an important and irreplaceable role in the whole society.In recene years,however,some people assert the international travelling carry the demerit more than the advantage.Personally,I would side with this view.   Indeed,the international travelling has taken some boons to the society .For example,sharing resources with so many countries must contribute to it:travelling in internation can open up a new vista for the visitors and may foster their ability to adapting the culture shocks independently.Naturely ,people can enjoy themself and reach self-fulfillment during the international journey.what is more ,countries maybe become more affluent by the international tourism.   In fact,the detrimental of the tripping is also manifest.It is well known that there is a akedness link between the tourism and some serious pollution ,such as wrapper of dessert's abusing and the prevalent rubbish .Therefore ,the environment problem would be triggered by travelling journey.As a reslut, the government in each state have to pay much more expenditure for finding the procedures to deal with environment problem when the international journey became more and more popular.     The banes of international journey is not only incarnated in the pollution,but also reflecting on the misunderstanding,.It has been confirmed that even if we have international tours,the travellers must still be afflicted with the culture shock.Because different country have different methodology.It must ruin the beauty of the visitors' shore time holiday,such as someone want to embrace a Chinese people when they meet at the first time  and the countries should left a bad impression to them.   In a word,I hold the opinion that the internationaltravelling has more demerit than its blessings. 请老师指导,在下感激不尽!!!! !!!!!![em20][em20]

xionggang 发表于 2006-6-9 01:30

谁要参加6月17日的雅思考试，快点告诉我

hxzerg001 发表于 2006-6-9 02:17

就要最后一天了，没指望了[em03]

8232889 发表于 2006-6-9 04:49

Version77What is responsibility of government? The defense of itself and the quality of citizen，which is more important to the government? Different people hold the different opinions about this issue. The public servants maintain that the national defense is the foundation of the development of country，so the large number of expenditure on national defense is more important. I，however hold the different views. Every citizen who is the master of country make up the country whose quality of life has a close relationship with the government of country .It’s the responsibility of government to enhance every individual’s quality of life ，which is the basis. If the country is wealthy and the nationals’ level of life is high，undoubtedly，it can spend more on the weapons to defend itself .For instance，like the country of American，Japan and the U.K，which are developed countries，have the ability to develop the state-of-the-art weapons，China is a developing country ，there are a lot of people who live under the poverty line and amount of the disabled. In this situation，can’t we spend much on weapons? If the government put a large amount of expenditure on weapons， it’s hard to guarantee the life of those people who are poor and disabled. Take the North Korea as an example. It’s quite a poor country，but it spends a lot of money on the nuclear weapon，which  lead to the country is more and more poor and the people in the country are more and more pitiful. Russia has almost the same situation. To sum up，the government of country should not spend much money on weapons on the situation of the lack of the domestic development. But
concentrate on the poor and disabled people.

bossliuxin 发表于 2006-6-9 16:45

希望多和老师你学习

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