写作与口语7分实用方法
if you got any questions or comments, just speak out. 学好语言要不择手段，特别是在中国。[align=right][color=#000066][此贴子已经被作者于2004-2-7 0:07:19编辑过][/color][/align]
就一句话, 想一想但别想多了.:P
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呵呵，有意思得文章捏~~ 可以啊可以!!!!!! 大家好！请问最近考了哪些题，望指教！谢谢 有意思 十分感谢
thank you! bumblebee:
我想问一下,你考口语时的CUE卡是的色的吗? 不错很实用。对于新的小作文有没什么建议？ i agree with u about speaking but my speaking only 6 . to those who thanked me: My pleasure!
to the person who asked about the colour of the cue cards : huh? i don't quite understand ur question.
to the guy who asked me for advice about the task 1 in writing: sorry, i have no idea! i don't know the current situation of task 1 ! basically, there's something in common in all kinds of task 1. find it out and keep practising.
to the one who got band 6 in speaking: did u do as i said? and which part of speaking do u think the weakest? think about it
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我也要7分啊
3x!! 问一下bumblebee:你靠口语时的E卡是什么颜色的啊?? the colour of my cue card? i have no idea!! never heard that would help candidates if knowing the colours. who cares? u know, guys, i was damn ill while having the speaking test - i felt dizzy, and my throat was burned by the acid from my stomach in the early morning. i just blurted out! sorry, i can't help. please ask else where. 刚才看了几篇帖子，我在这想说的是大家烤鸭时候一定要灵活，鸭是死的，弄活它。虽然目前雅思形势我不太了解，但我一再强调的举一反三是在任何考试中都需要的。考官喜欢的不是你背下来的标准答案，而是你的创新能力。多读书看报上科技新闻网，摘取有用材料，再加以自己的见解，为我所用，无论写作还是口语，都能一举成功。 BUMBLBEE,偶的a类写作是8月9日写的,是6分.我12月20日要再参加次g类写作,必须得7分.你可以帮忙看一眼我的文章,帮我点拨一下我的要命点在何处.此处先多行拜谢了.
topic: in many countries the problem of drug-taking is increasing. government and the general public are particularly concerned about young people using illegal drugs such as marijuana, ecstasy and heroin.
what mehtods could be used to prevent young people from taking drugs. is it appropriate to send young drug-users to prison?
given reasons for your answer
the problem of the young generation's increasing addiction to drugs is becoming an overwelming public concern around the countries because of its negative social influence and harmful effect. undoubtedly the measures to prevent the young's invovlement in these bad behavours should be taken widely and urgently. the following passages will discuss what actions the government and public c ould do with this issue.
most important is the society and family's concern on those young people who tend to be the future drug addicts. a variety of research figures on drug users come to a conculsion that many young children become addicted to drugs to pursue a sort of miraculous illusion drug-taking provides because of the pressure of unhappy family fighting and school competition. when the community and school notice some young people isolated and depressed, he should be able to be hepled out by means of cousulting or visiting the psychologist. leaving hime alone wohld truly lead to the way to drug-taking.
on the other hand the national advertisement on the dangerous and deadly effect brought out by drugs should be promoted. were the young informed the terrible harm drug-using could do, they should not be easy to resort to it as a comfort when facing difficulties and misery in life.
some person raises a suggestion that putting the drug-takers into prison act as a way to help them get rid of addiction. this is not an appropriate means since for those using harmful drugs they would have the feeling of being denied and thrown away by the whole society while in prison, and such a feeling must push them further addicted to drugs whenever they've got a drug-taking chance again.
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the problem of the young generation's increasing addiction to drugs is becoming an overwelming[overwhelming] public concern around the countries[world].[(cut) because of its negative social influence and harmful effect.undoubtedly the measures to prevent the young's invovlement in these bad behavours should be taken widely and urgently.]the following passages will discuss what actions the government and public could do with this issue.[sounds like giving a lecture :P]
[ just one or two sentence would be okay. rewrite it. how about start with a question or an example that indicates the cause and effect?]
[The] most important[importantly] is the[delete "the"] society and family's[family] concern on those young people who tend to be the future drug addicts[(cut) on those young drug-takeers]. a variety of research figures [add "show"] [(cut) on drug users come to a conculsion] that many young children become addicted to drugs to pursue a sort of miraculous illusion drug-taking provides [(try to use "this is a reason why.."sentence structure)because of the pressure of unhappy family fighting and school competition. when the community and school notice some young people[delete "some young people",add "they"] isolated and depressed,] he should be able to be[can be] hepled out by means of[delete "means of"] cousulting or visiting[delete "or visiting"] the{delete "the"] psychologist. leaving hime[him]alone wohld[delete "would", add "may"] truly[delete "truly"] lead to the way to[delete "the way to"] drug-taking.
[Gosh, i find that your sentence structure very "complecated"! don't jump into conclusions! And, can you type ur words correctly? it seems that you just don't care! (if so, i doubt if it's worth helping ur essay.]
on the other hand [add ","] [why use "on the other hand"? how does it link to the passage above? see their relationship.] the national advertisement[sorry,what is the national ad?] on the dangerous and deadly effect [add "which is] brought out by drugs should[can] be promoted[avoid passive voice] .were the young informed the terrible harm drug-using could do, they should[would] not be easy to[delete "be easy to"] resort to it as a comfort when facing difficulties and misery in life.
[okay, prevention is better than cure. but what if all have happened?]
some person[somebody] raises a suggestion that putting[to put] the drug-takers into prison act[delete "act"] as a way to help them get rid of addiction[delete "addiction",add"drugs"].[add linking words here] this is not an appropriate means[an means??] since[change it into "because" or "as"] for those [add "who'] using[use] harmful[delete "harmful"] drugs they[delete "they"] would [add "probably] have the feeling of being denied and thrown away by the whole society while in prison[delete "while in prison"], and such a[delete 'and such a",add "a"] feeling must[can] push them further addicted to drugs whenever they've got {delete "a drug-taking"}[add "a"] chance again.
[okay, so how should we treat the drug-takeers? your thought was not completed. how about convert this paragrah to the second one?]
[better draw a conclusion in the end]
[P.S.don't feel painful by my comments if u wanna update this. im very critical of writing.:)]
my reply to "吴建业的作文套句那有download啊????" is
I don't know. But if you got them, don't just cram!
oh yeah, echotutu, remember logic and creativity is the most important. my edits are not everything.(and i didn't check each mistake u made) add something "NEW" into ur writing.
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bumblebee, thank your for your kind help.
it seems that you don't prefer complicated sentences. What's the problem?
Next time before i put my article here, i'll correct my grammer and spelling first. Sorry to trouble you in this way.
thank you for your correcting again. I truly learn a lot although i don't agree on your deletion in my complicated sentence. hehe.
[em08][em01] BUMBLEBEE，谢谢你，辛苦了[em01]再贴一篇文章。
The average British child between the age of 4 and 15 watches more than 20 hours of television a week. Studies show she/he only spends about 7 hours per week on physical exercise.
How does this compare with the situation in your country? How can parents make sure children get enough exercise ? Given reason for your answer.
A survey carried out recently in Britain shows that compared with long hours sitting in front of television, average British child has spent little time doing physical outdoor and indoor exercises, which is believed to deteriorate their health. The same situation is noticed in China, and even worse. To most Chinese parents, it’ merely the school’s responsibility to alert the young people’s interest in physical exercises and get them involved. When the children finish their assignments home, the only entertainment the families provide is television programs. Since keeping children home watching TV is a comparatively easy way, parents prefer not to take trouble and risk getting children do any physical exercise out of their sight. As a result, young people in China are found to spend more time , sometimes 25 hours a week, in watching television than their British counter part.(139)
However what long hours of sticking to television brings to the teenagers is a serious problem ignored by parents. Both children’s eyesight and health are becoming worse while staring at the screen for a long time.(37)
Based on these facts, it’s time for parents to be aware of the importance of involving children in exercise. Actually kinds of ways may be used to promote exercising. Firstly in weekends the park is a good exercising spot where parents and children play outdoor games like badminton, volleyball and football. Secondly if parent are so engaged in their work that they couldn’t spare time to do exercises together, demanding their children to do housework is also a good way to get them do exercises and cultivate their good habits. Last but not least, keep children away form television and set a timetable for them. Restrict time for their television watching and they should be encouraged to play with their friends in the neighborhood after finishing homework.(127)
In conclusion, children ought to be told the importance of doing exercises by their parents and spend proper time in front of television.(22)
[em08] 考口语前等待时是怎么度过的啊？
那时心情如何？ 会有点紧张，我是两点多一点考的，因为上午考好后就直接去了华师大的口语考试的底楼坐着看了会书，吃了面包，然后还打了个盹，因为等待的时间长了，旁边有个小池养鱼的，我还看门卫给喂鱼，其实当时，还可以不太紧张，后来提前半个多小时上去的时候，（一般要早点去会提前考，我提前了10分钟多）里面的人个个看起来面色不好，小声地七嘴八舌，我才紧张了点。而且考我的那个是个表情严肃的男的，我自己觉得第二部分说CUE CARD的时候发挥的不好，是让我说个TRIP，我都没有说到时间就停在那里了，但第三部分说到污染问题和小车问题的时候，我应该发挥的比较好，比较自如，所以得了7分。 所以大家如果在考试中如果有某一环节发挥不好，也不要紧张，当作拉家常，把后面发挥好，还是可以拿个好分数的。因为我本来觉得自己肯定只有6分了。。。[em07] to annie427 - u asking me? if yes, i can tell u at that time i listened to english songs and tried to refresh myself! it works a lill. if not, leave it. :P
to echotutu - don't get me wrong. i accept "complicated sentenses", but u see, u did not use them in a proper way, which can be considered as a poor command of english grammar. for instance, in the last para. "this is not an appropriate means since for those using harmful drugs they would have the feeling of being denied and thrown away by the whole society while in prison, and such a feeling must push them further addicted to drugs whenever they've got a drug-taking chance again." very complicated, and that means confused tiresomely long. And, u know why i adviced u to delete so many words, especailly in the first para? because they are wearisome and meaningless. u just keep repeating ur words and meanings.
oh yes, sorry, i just found that some of my corrections are wrong. perhaps i got dizzy while editting ur "complecated sentences". :P (again, coz that's just my opinion, i could be wrong. hehe)
as regards of ur 2nd essay, im not gonna go through it. you've got to find out the mistakes by yourself! see, u made the same mistakes again. overall, this essay is more fluent than the first one.
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1111 请问口语机经和吴建业的作文套句到那有download的？请赐教，谢谢！很有启发 有帮助！ 我想问考过的朋友，我听力机井背的很熟可却得了5.5分。为什么？谁能告诉我比较权威的机井？ heh e
真是个好东东！~ xuzhijunxzj, 可能你记得太熟了！没有什么可靠的机井，靠自己啦！lol 请问口语考试是不是就是那16个TOPIC啊？
考管就只在这里面抽这考你啊。
谢谢！！！ 还行 啊 good
你真牛。谢谢你分享你的经验 Vielen Danke! up 想问一下，现在写作还有可以准备的题目呢？不是一直在出新题吗？
不是说没有写作的预测了吗 谢谢你哦！！！！