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（一）根据慎小嶷预测写的作文，请修改。感激涕零。Topic:Some people think students should obey the rules but others think doing that does not help students prepare for their adult life.Discuss.
In the day and age,it is commonly believed that students should obey the rules plays a vitally important role in our lives.But in the meantime,whether teenagers should obey the rules or not has become a highly debatable issue.Some people think that youngsters should obey the rules while others think that obey the rules does not help students prepare for their adult life.Personally,I am in favor of the latter view.
Granted,youths obey the rules carry some advantages.It is tempting to argue that adolescent under the demand of rules are hardly to behave imporperly.To illustrate,it can reduce the criminal among students.Moreover,people who under 18 years old abide by the rules are benefit to develop a sense of obligation.Today,it seems that 2/3 of the children,who comply with the rules,have a better ability to restrain themselves.
Nevertheless,the disadvantages of teenagers abide by the rules cannot be ignored.In the first place,the rules make children under pressure.Generally speaking,with the limit,children cannot do something they want to do ,but it is banned to do by the rules.In the second place,the rules has transformed their mind.Indeed,instead of promote the students physical and emotional development,rules give them a lot of prohibitions,thereby greatly extinguishing their creativity.Last but not least,the rules mould their,character by the same modle.As a matter of fact,youths should not follow something bringly and obey for rules' own sake.
In the final analysis,I concede children obey the rules does some upsides.However,the benefits creative to children far outweigh the blindly obey the rules.Overall,I am conviced that obey rules does not prepare for their adult life.
（二）根据杨凡预测写的作文，如果哪位牛人老师有空的话能不能帮我改下，评下分？超级感谢。
TOPIC5：What are the advantages and disadvantages of the Internet?
Currently,the Internet has been brought to the public focus and as to whether it is benefit for people or not,there is no general consensus among people from all walks of life.Of course,there is a grain legitimacy in both views expounded by two sides.
According to the opponents,Internet has a lot of drawbacks.Firstly,both adults and children are paying attention to the Internet.They surf the Internet day and night,so that their career and study fall into disuse.As we know,people addicted to online games and chatting lead to the emotional distance.Secondly,surfing the Internet a long time is harm for people’s sight even health,especially to teenagers.Moreover,some people behave improperly on the Internet.For example,they release pornograph and violence movies and articles to the Internet.So the opponents argue that its disadvantages should not be ignored.
By contrast,the proponents believe the advantages of the Internet are obviously.For one thing,nowadays,it is a civilized social filled with technology,the Internet is a landmark of man’s intelligent.For another,science and technology developing faster and faster,a great deal of things can be done on the Internet.It makes our life convenient.The most important thing is that the Internet is a window which people can see the whole world.Everybody can feel the culture in different countries.They can get information at first time.Internet can also enrich our life while online games is a methods to relaxing.Little by little,Internet will play an important role in people’s life.
In a word,although both aspects make sense to some degrees,I assert that the latter one is more reasonable.We should recognize the advantages of the Internet.And at the same time,we should learn how to use the Internet in a right way.
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