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[size=5]Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational,otherwise they are a complete waste of time.[/size][size=5][/size]
[size=5]Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.[/size]
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Nowdays,for average family,the expense on educating their children is increasing.Nothing is more important than to educate their children in a right way.But what is the right way? Some people think children should do the educational activities,such as learning arts or studying,rather than play with other children,because they think it is a waste of time.As for me,I can not agree with the opinion totally.
In the first place,playing is children's natural characters,forcing them to study some sujects would not get the good effects.According scientific research,in one's childhood anything is strange to them. So during they play some toys or play some games with others,which is also a study process for them.In contrast,parents force their children to sit in the classroom to study the subjects that children dislike,which always can not get the good result.
In addition,over study will harm children's growth.Nowdays,most parents like their children to learn art sujects,so they invest more money on the art lessons for their children in their leisure time.For instance, I know a family with a 10 years old child.Form Monday to Friday,the child always finishs his homework around 9:00 pm at night.However,On Saturdays,his mother takes him to learn the piano and On Sundays his father takes him to study english.For this child,he has no time to play with his peers or watch TV.This does harmful to his healthy.
Form what has been discussed above,I can draw a conclusion safely that parents should give the leisure time to their children.Children should have the rights to control their leisure time freely.Using the leisure time,they can communicate with their peers or do many sports exercise.Only like this,their children can grow in a healthy way. 自己顶一下，希望朋友们给指点指点。 挺多语法错误，句子结构变化不多，语言深度不够，特别是第三段后部分写的不是很好，有点像记叙文，5分左右吧~~有待提高~~加油
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