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Q: [size=10.5pt]In some countries, insufficient respect is shown to young people. What are the reasons and what problems does it cause to the society.[/size]
[size=10.5pt]There is an argument aims to a problem that young people don’t receive sufficient respect from people in society especially who are older. Variety of reasons cause this but the only 2 reasons play the most important role in lacking of respect of young people, which is discussed as followed.
People who don’t pay attention to giving respect to others will not receive enough respect he wants. Depending on currently educational environment, we can infer that we unhealthily [color=black]emphasize individual abilities but ignore either the whole or the teamwork[/color][color=black] in the attitudes of education[/color][color=black]. As a result, in this situation, it’s easy to [/color][color=black]know[/color][color=black] why young people always notice what he act but not[/color][color=black] be[/color][color=black] care[/color][color=black]ful in getting along with[/color][color=black] others. [/color][color=black][/color]
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Furthermore, the media acts a loser in this problem because of the negative advertisement of young people who are not horrible as media said. Beijing Television Station was a typical example towards what I mentioned above. In 2004, it’s reported that a 15 years old boy dead in a disco dancing pub, because he took too many drugs, to sum up, the BTV told us there is 15% of children have the habit. As time goes, this report was gradually proved as a misleading advertisement, the true number is near 0.3% which is much less than report by BTV. Consequently,it is easy to understand why people at large, especially older those who are older, don’t know the reality about young people.
Therefore, things will become better and better in the future. According to the policy which is held recently we can get such information, for one thing, the government is paying more attention to young guys’ education. For another the direction of media will be corrected to a right way which includes positive report about young people.
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[size=10.5pt]大概是几分的水平 哪里需要改进 有什么语法错误吗？
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