请大家帮忙评判一下19号考的作文，是否真的只够5.
烦请各位烤鸭帮忙看一下我19号写的作文，成绩下来是5，但很想复议，请大家帮忙看看，如果真的水平不及，我就打消复议的念头了。[font=宋体]题目：[/font][font=Times New Roman]Figures show that some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of the population who are aged 15 or younger. What do you think the current and future effect of this may be for those countries.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]According to certain research, the proportion of younger people aged 15 or even younger is presenting an increasingly upward trend in some countries, especially in developing ones, which may definitely bring about certain effects both in nowadays and in a long run.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Firstly, in terms of short-term effect, the increasing percentage of youngsters may means that the need for education is much more than ever before. It requires that government should exert its utmost to improving education level not only by enhancing teaching facilities but also by training more qualified teachers. So that not only students from rich families could receive higher education, but also those from rural areas, could have equal chance to be educated. For another, ever-increasing youngsters may add risk of juvenile delinquency. Especially those who are living in divorced families, for lack of enough care from parents, they are likely to be misled to break law, such as stealing, bullying others and even taking drugs, which may give rise to social chaos, to certain extent.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Secondly, considering youngsters being the main force in labor market, they may push forward one country to achieve economic development and social improvement in a long run. In other words, youngsters as the hope of our future, if well- educated and informed, they can contribute more to the prosperity of a country. [/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]To sum up, though the increasing number of youngsters may bring about certain social problem and put more pressure on government, we should hold an optimistic view for its positive effect in a long run. [/font] 我看很好 怎么只给了5 那帮每人性贵佬 鄙视他们:nu2
成绩7 复议完毕 关键要看大作文。小作文只要写得不差就行！我也是5 ，也很苦恼。
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