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mike23 发表于 2005-1-22 22:18

<P>舒服!我的英语水平很烂,写作也让我很痛,在论坛上看了这么多的高分作文就一个感觉,他们的文章流畅,思路清晰,用词其实都不是很难的,不想上辅导班的老师说的多用些7分词,8分词,最好是别人都不认识的.纯撤!!!</P><P>像我这种水平都能看懂,但就是写不出来,呵呵.</P><P>羡慕啊!顶一个!我写作的目标是6分.呵呵</P><P>我2月26号在郑州考,有通道中人没?</P>

KAWAA 发表于 2005-1-26 22:34

<P><FONT size=2>, there<FONT color=#ff0033> has</FONT> been arguments about</FONT></P><P><FONT size=2>这句话感觉怪怪的,我就不会写出这句</FONT></P><P><FONT size=2>语法是对的么</FONT></P>

zhangy1124 发表于 2005-2-3 20:57

<P>大力支持本类贴的出现~~</P>

winniewk 发表于 2005-2-25 22:32

haha  

cnu 发表于 2005-2-26 06:22

ding

东京惠比寿 发表于 2005-2-27 22:58

CHINGLISH,

steveyyf 发表于 2005-3-15 07:07

不错不错,可以拿来背一下了

steveyyf 发表于 2005-3-15 07:55

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profuture 发表于 2005-3-22 18:57

<P>Ding!</P>[em02]

diablo1986 发表于 2005-3-24 21:51

语法错误很少,论点很好,论据充分,长短句相接,句型多样!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![em03][em04][em07]

nafei 发表于 2005-3-30 03:42

看来评分主要是以文章的思想为主

chanel1103 发表于 2005-4-14 07:16

a beautiful essay

joyhuang23 发表于 2005-4-16 19:19

<P>对呀,别管人家是不是武断,人家能自圆其说,而且这本身也是说自己的论点。只要表达清楚,句子用的好那就是好作文。</P><P>受教育中。</P>

joyhuang23 发表于 2005-4-16 19:20

厉害呀,什么时候能达到这个水平就好了

nintendo 发表于 2005-4-17 22:03

好贴!!!

silwen 发表于 2005-5-9 08:01

<P>飘过……顶……</P>

dxbcy 发表于 2005-5-20 05:21

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gabrieljn 发表于 2005-6-16 01:48

其实我觉得要让读者在你的文章中看到的是你充满自信的观点,不管该观点的对错与否

yummyenglish 发表于 2005-6-29 03:06

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<DIV>Do the negative effects of some international media such as TV and magazine for example overweigh the positive effects?</DIV>
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<DIV><IMG src="http://www.fotosearch.com/comp/IST/IST188/V3048048.jpg">International media such as TV network and magazine always gives people in an information age mixed feelings. Like many other things, media is double-edged. </DIV>
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<DIV>As primary channels of information, TV and magazine are convenient and economic sources of information for knowledge, entertainment, and shopping. Interestingly, sometimes the same piece of information varies considerably in its influences on audiences of different age. For example, in a TV commercial, a beautiful lady promotes a certain brand of perfume, which supposablely makes girls more attractive to boys. For potential grownup buyers, the ad is useful because they might be spending time searching for such products. We save time in shopping and making decision by making use of such advertisements. However, a teenage girl might get the wrong idea about the concept of perfume. She could get money from her parents to buy the advertised product. Worse yet, she might use the sex appeal strategy employed in the commercial to get ahead in the future. This is classic bad influence of media for young people’s overspending and inappropriate behaviors. </DIV>
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<DIV>However, we find it very difficult to weight between merits and problems of media because they are often closely incorporated. For instance, violent scenes in movies are believed to be partially responsible for violence-related crimes, particularly those committed by young people. But on the contrary, such movies also give people a channel to release their anger, anxiety, and pressure. Moreover, these movies show us bad and evil as well as punishments for wrongdoings. Imagine we live in a world whose media is completely clean in such sense. The dark side of media does not disappear just because we do not talk about it. Nevertheless certain kinds of information such as porn are better kept away from young people.  </DIV>
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<DIV>In conclusion, media should not be seen simply as bad or good because we need to use information properly to the best of our ability. But for certain segments of viewers, we should be very careful with regard to the content of information and take measures to keep viewers from possible harmful influences of media.</DIV></DIV></DIV></FONT></TD></TR></TABLE>

new-zealand 发表于 2005-7-1 20:12

<P>我9月也要考试了,看到这个作文哦,真的是我的大难题啊`~~~~~~~~~~~难啊~~~~~~~~`</P>

promiseting 发表于 2005-7-4 08:01

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sunnyisdisi 发表于 2005-7-7 20:10

<P>写得还真不错</P>

Sandy713 发表于 2005-7-16 02:23

<P>C'est parfait</P>[em07]

tnmx 发表于 2005-7-21 01:13

<P>请教各位:Do the negative effects of some international media such as TV and magazine for example overweigh the positive effects?这类题目的观点可以是站在中间立场么?如:媒体本身无谓好坏,而要看谁,如何对待媒体。</P>

liuyiwon 发表于 2005-8-5 03:33

<P>好多人说观点武断,我不觉得。老外不是流行头脑风暴法吗?最好是每个人都拿个极端的观点进行彻底的论证,这样很多论点都会比较有新意</P>

liuyiwon 发表于 2005-8-5 03:37

本人5与考过一回,记得是说高中毕业生毕业是继续读书好,还是去工作。我就抱着工作好一个劲的钻,感觉写的不好,语言很中国本土化,结果还有6分

ysf200000 发表于 2005-8-15 22:53

<P><FONT face="Times New Roman">1.These two tasks decide that university focus on theoretical knowledge, but not practical training. What’s people looking for in the further education in university? 这句里的decide 好像有些chinese English嫌疑,是不是改为according to the two tasks the university....</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman">2.not necessarily 是不是因该用unnecessarily 更好</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman">嘿嘿,鸡蛋里挑骨头。。反正比我写的好。</FONT></P>

wuxiaochun1985 发表于 2007-10-30 15:44

比新东方那些套路看上去真,估计套路搬上去老外直接给6分了;P

beihorse 发表于 2007-12-9 22:37

没想到这样的文章也能得8分,在我看来很多地方需要改。错的地方显然也不止两处。有些错要一点功力才能看出来,但老外一眼就能直出来。不过考场上如果能写成这样也凑合了。

 

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