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我自己按照一个预测题目写的文章 请何老师和各位指教, 拜托了!!!!!!

我自己按照一个预测题目写的文章 请何老师和各位指教, 拜托了!!!!!!

Nature and nurture, which plays major role in personality and development?

Talking of one’s personality and development, I maintain that nurture has major impact on them other than nature.

Nature is always, to some extent, considered as a gift or invariable quality which is given to one as he was born. Things are divided into different categories by their natures, like apples and oranges, it’s difficult for one to confuse them.

Interestingly, unlike the literal meaning of the famous “apples and oranges” saying, a person differs from others for an unique personality which may change with one’s growing up.

In other words, depending on factors such as affections from parents, education background, experience, self-striving and so forth as well as nature, a personality is surely the result of long-time nurture, on purpose or not sometimes. Therefore, it’s changeable and moldable. Moreover, since personalities very much decide people’s activities, they do effect their development as well. So, nurture is of great significance not only in personality but also in one’s development.

For example, American People is a mixed nationality with people from all over the world, who possess very different natures. But through a great and powerful social system which encourages individualism, freedom and fair competitions, it now has been nurtured several common spirits, values and personalities shared by its people and develop itself into a powerful country known for its creativity, democracy and technology.

In conclusion, personality is molded by nurture, which by the way is very lucky for us because it’s possible for people to decide their directions of developments by forming good personalities.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-4-10 21:14:55编辑过]

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第一次写雅思作文,没上过任何辅导班,没背模板.

大家见笑了

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你这个结构……真的很新奇啊

感觉你第二段的连接词不错

但in a word ,in conclusion我觉得你要拿高分还是别用

我没细看,但是第一段那个“them”指代的是什么啊?不好意思,我语法不好,我也不敢说你就一定错了,况且我看你后面有的长句子写的不错~~所以多半是我孤陋寡闻,,哈哈

我真看不出这能吃几分。。但我还是建议你每段首句用简单句概括整段意思。

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谢谢指导啦,我水平也不高

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ding

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