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The prisoner

In modern times ,with the developing of economic, more and more prison turn up in the social. But there is a problem become important than before. It is whether make the prisoner working or learn skill in the prison. People donnt know which one is best.

Most people think that we should make the prisoner working in the prison. First , it is fair to the social because they are bad for social. Such as , steal or kill someone. Most people think they will be punished in the prison. Second , it maybe give a choice to the prisoner. It will help the prison think about his mistake and what is bad the things.

Others consider that we should help the prisoner learn different kinds of skill. The people think it will help the prisoner give up the bad habit and bring the good habit in their life. It will help the prisoners earn money to support themselves when they are outside the prison.. They will say goodbye to commit a crime to go a new life.

In a word, On the one hand , we should find out what is the good side in the working and what is the good side in learn different kind of skill. On the other hand , we should find a good way to put together with working and learn skill to help the prisoner in the prison. I think it is the best way to the prisoner to exchange themselves. And it will decrease the rate of the commit a crime in the social.

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错误太多了,如果改的话,重写可能更方便些,建议楼主检查一下先

总体感觉5分,也许不到,语法错误可圈可点,逻辑上许多方面站不住脚,楼主加油啊

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