作文练习一篇，麻烦打分和指点~！谢谢
雅思作文练习（学术类）一篇，麻烦在百忙之中给我一些指点。题目是《剑桥雅思2》P25的Task 1。就是描述consumer durables的表格图。
问题：
1、表格8行8列，有许多数据，一时不知道怎样写了，觉得写得好像流水账，表达方式死板，变化不多。写出来的文章比较乏味。
2、而且好像字数太多了，230 words.
3、写Task 1是重在描述数字变化特点和趋势？那还用分析么？因为我看到《剑2》的范文好像就分析了一下。
谢谢指点！！
正文：
The diagram,presented as a table,depicts the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.
As can be seen from the table,the figures cover eight kinds of consumer durables,which are central heating,television,video,vacuum cleaner,refrigerator,washing machine,dishwasher and telephone.The tendency of these figures are all in growth as a whole in the years spanning from 1972 to 1983.There were 37 families in a hundred which had central heating,and the percentage went up to 64% in 1983. Compared with other durables,the television was much more important for a family.It accounted fo 93% of households in 1972, and the data went up steadily during the following years.In 1983,the data was 98%,approaching 100%.Vacuum cleaner and refrigerator were very important as well,the percentages grew up from 87% in 1972 to 95% twelve years later and from 73% in 1972 to 94% in 1983 respectively.Washing machine took up 66% in the households,and this figure comed up to 80% in 1983,with an increase of 14%.In 1972,the percentage of households whith telephone was 42%,this figure increased more rapidly compared with others,which reached 77% in 1983,almost twice as that in 1972.
On the other hand,the dishwasher had not appeared as a consumer durable in family until the year of 1978.And the figure increased slightly from 3% in 1978 to 5% in 1983,which was increased by only 2%.In 1983,the video firstly became one of the consumer durables with the percentage of 18%.
