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请帮忙看一下这个文章能得多少分，怎么修改好，谢谢。

These charts indicates the reasons why adults decide to study and how people think the costs of each course should be shared in percentage.

The bar diagram demonstrates that having interest in subject and acquiring qualifications are the two major reasons for study.The former accounts for 40% and the latter makes up 38%.People who think that study is helpful for current job,constituting 22%,as well as reason of improving prospects of promotion and enjoy learning or studying,both accounting for 20%,are the second important reasons.The other reasons for study receive similarly small percentages,ranging from 12% for being able to change jobs to 9% for meeting people.

According to the pie chart,there are 40% people consider the costs of adult education should be shared by individual.35% people support the employer should pay the costs of each couse and others chose the texpayor.

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parwa

首先，文章缺少一个结尾，这里提供一个以供参考：

After a close examination, it won't be difficult to find that interest in the leading reason why adults decide to further their study and people are willing to pay most of the cost by themselves.

文章虽然很好地再现了图表的内容，语言体现了丰富的句式，很有可取之处，但存在几个基本的语法错误，如： These charts indicates， there are 40% people consider。

总的来看，这篇小作文可以得到6分。

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承蒙指教，万分感谢。