Topic: Some people claim that scientists contribute much to the society and civilization, and the science students should receive more financial support from governments. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?
"The society": some people maintain there should be no "the" for society, some think otherwise. I do know there is no "the" for civilization, nature, birth, death, life, information...(except for specific reference.) But I am not sure about "the" for society. I dont' use it myself, but I am no expert in English. (My grammar teachers almost died of frustration teaching me.)
Many people maintain that scientists play an more important role in the world than other occupations (scientists are people; occupations are inanimate objects)- ->than people in other occupations , so the government ought to support (the) science students more in financially. To my way of thinking, that’s utter nonsense. Either the manual or non-manual labor constitutes an essential part of our society. --> Both manual and non-manual labor constitute the essential parts of our society. (Either the manual or non-manual… means one or the other, but not both.)
In On one hand, scientists actually promote the development of our society and civilization. They are certain vanguards of our human kind as they have the most brilliant brains and the most sophisticated ideas. Once they pose a tentative idea, some great invention may be created. Take the two biologists, (comma) Waston and Crick,(comma) who posed the theory of two the double helix structure of DNA for example. If there were no such braving=? bold assumption, there won’t be such highly-developed technologies in today’s bio-career in which humans benefited a lot. --> … there would not be today’s highly developed biotechnology from which humans have benefited greatly.
In On the other hand, other occupations also serves a vital parts to of our world. Every one contributes their his painstaking effort to their his own fields. Or All people contribute their painstaking efforts to their own fields. (with “all people” counted as plural instead of singular.)
(Such as the teacher---the engineer/architect of human’s soul.)(In principle, only a creator can engineer a human souls. Souls are built in and cannot be reprogrammed. Try: essence. ) (This is a sentence fragment) (You need to tie this in with another clause.) It Teaching was once considered as the greatest occupation in general.(Teachers are the people; teaching is the profession/occupation.) Teachers impart their rich knowledge to the students including the scientists and any other people in deferent=? (different) careers in the future. --> Teachers impart their rich knowledge to the scientists and other professional of the future. (No need to say “to the students who will become scientists….”)
In By the same logic, we cannot overlook the other non-manual labor such as the building construction workers in whose hand the city’s infrastructure facilities are built;(semi-colon) the farmers through whose efforts we can enjoy the fresh vegetables and fruits; the drivers without whom we can’t have (such a satisfying transportation system)/(satisfying transportation); and so on.
To sum up, whether you are a member of the so-called “elite” in the sophisticated career or a commonplace laborer, everyone should be treated equally in the society., because everyone with different jobs plays an essential role in the field=?. So the government should also treat the students with various majors equally and encourage all the students to study hard with the intention that the country will be built more and more prosperously. ( I don’t think you can build a country prosperously, but you can make a country become more and more prosperous.)
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看看能拿多少分 I know a student who writes almost flawlessly got only a 6, while another one who writes less well than you do managed to get a 7. Your guess is as good as mine.
[此贴子已经被作者于2005-9-10 14:03:15编辑过]
