copycat

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After the first computer came into the world, computers have been widely used in every aspect of our life including education field so that people can study at anytime anywhere now. Some people think that teachers in the classroom are no longer necessary. This is also what in my mind. We have reasons to believe that with the development of the computer technology, students will never need to go to classroom in the near future.

First of all, the great improved internet speed which provided us the fluent video transfer around the world make it available for us to join a virtual class just like sitting in the classroom. What is advanced is that we can choose what we want to learn instead of wait until the teachers to feed up. It is an efficient and positive way through which we can learn more. This is what the teachers can not do.

Another advantage must be mentioned is that we can discuss questions with people from different cultures on the internet. If we are in the classroom, the only person we will meet is the neighbors who may hold similar opinion as ours on same problem in the same area. However, we can receive different suggestions from all over the world by using the computer. Prefect answers may be found to explain some unsolvable problems.

To sum up, I am in the full conviction that with the development of the computer science, the flaws of computers will be overcome in the future and the teachers in the classroom will be gradually replaced by the computers sooner or later

[此贴子已经被作者于2003-8-23 11:54:38编辑过]

kaixinguo

up !!!!!!!!!!!!!!

maoxiandiyi

还我去灌水灌到200块钱,可恶

copycat

好了，我已经解除了金钱标记，希望我这篇文章能考个高分^_^

velvet

After the first computer came into the world, computers have been widely used in every aspect of our life including education field so that people can study at anytime anywhere now. Some people think that teachers in the classroom are no longer necessary. This is also what in my mind.(中文用法) We have reasons to believe that(中文用法) with the development of the computer technology, students will never need to go to classroom in the near future.
First of all, the great improved internet speed（语序好乱阿~~~用of吧） which provided us the fluent（换个形容词） video transfer around the world make it available for us to join a virtual class just like sitting in the classroom. What is advanced is that we can choose what we want to learn instead of wait (词性) until the teachers to feed up. It is an efficient and positive way through (介词不对) which we can learn more. This is what the teachers can not（cannot英国用法） do.
Another advantage must be mentioned is that we can discuss questions with people from different cultures on the Internet. If we are in the classroom, the only person we will meet is the neighbors（一致关系，这个词放这里不合适） who may hold similar opinion as ours（中文用法） on same problem in the same area. However, we can receive different suggestions from all over the world by using the computer. Prefect answers may be found to explain some unsolvable problems.
To sum up, I am in the full conviction that with the development of the computer science, the flaws of computers will be overcome in the future and the teachers in the classroom will be gradually replaced by the computers(复述名词前的the去掉) sooner or later.

小女子斗胆修改精华贴，还请作者原谅

copycat

velvet

怎么？我改的不对吗？

copycat

很好呀

bumblebee

no creativity

copycat

只有6分

velvet

差不多啦

copycat

这是我自我感觉最好的文章了，而且是事先准备好的，如果要现场写，不可能写的更好了。
如果它都只有6分.....

bumblebee

that's why hehe

velvet

~~~~~

gokui

"the great improved internet speed which provided us the fluent video transfer around the world make it available for us to join a virtual class just like sitting in the classroom. "
我想这句话就代表了本文的问题所在,过分追求复杂句式,结果把意思弄的晦涩难懂
本句的意思是:'因为因特网的速度变快了,可以让我们看到世界范围内传播的流畅影像,
那我们就可以在网上加入虚拟课堂学习就像在现实里坐在教室里学习一样.
改为:" many fluent ,world-transfer videos ,contributing to the high connection speed of
internet ,make us conveniently studying in a virtual class just like in a real classroom

copycat

写复杂句也有错啊，我觉得我这句话不算很难懂啊，比GRE阅读里的那些不像人话的话好懂多了
一_一

othy

你这句话就是错了~~不要狡辩