模拟考官

07年8月11日A类考题为

The range and quality of food have been improved by the advancement of science and

technology. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

08年7月12日的A类考题为

Some people support the development in agriculture such as factory farming and

scientific creations of new types of fruits and vegetables. Others oppose.

Discuss both of the views and give your opinions.

表面上看两道题有区别，其实写作思路可以基本一样。第二道比第一道多了个factory

farming,但是它是用such as的形式出现的，所以你也可以只讨论后面的creations of

new types offruits and vegetables，这样一来就与去年的杀手题差不多了。

考题分析： focus : development in agriculture. 对比：未改进/ 革新的农业产品

VS 改进/ 革新的农业产品。这道题的对比比较清晰，focus不是很清晰，用常识判断，

应该从support下手，既然support,肯定是positive effects of development in

agriculture. oppose意味着negative effects. 所以这道题可当作利弊题来写，也可

以当成一边倒的议论文来写。focus应该是effects of developments in agriculture

on every aspect related to human beings.

我们可以这样理解，由于这道题所涉及内容较难，所以focus比较泛，不像那些表面上

看起来很容易的题目用一个很窄的focus来限制发挥和提高难度。

要知道我的一个学生去年口语拿了8分，其它两科得了7分，写作却只考了5分，我一直

叹息不已，因为我以我的学生的写作成绩低于任何其它科的为辱！她就是碰到07年的

那道杀手题，只要问题是她完全不理解题意，在考试中从拿到那道题目开始至

终她都不知如何下手。可是听我一讲她又觉得很简单。

     www.ieltstutor.cn 的模拟考官欢迎当天考生来提供回忆，我看能否帮你们找出

问题所在并给出相应的得分。

gavin7890

老师您好，能不能点评一下6月28的作文。题目大家感觉都不难，可是出来分数普遍不理想。这题主要切入点在哪呢？ 题目大概是这样
Mobile phones and the internet can bring many benefits to old people. Howerer, old people is the section that use such technology the least. In what ways do you think mobile phones and the internet can be useful to old people? How do you think old people can be encouraged to use them

blanket

老师，712的题目，你说对比的是 developments VS 不发展，

这个" 不发展农业"，是否意味的就是 traditional ways of farming ？？？

我写的就是 保持traditional ways  和 development 的对比，至于traditional ways 有什么不好：低效率不足以满足food crisis, less choices 不足以满足large population;    有人觉得不发展的好因为觉得它生产出的food更健康，但其实现在环境污染严重，于是对soil 的污染也严重，traditional ways 不见得健康……………… etc.

模拟考官

2楼的gavin7890：表面上看起来很容易的题目，其实也不容易。
6月28日的A类考题为讨论文
Mobile phones and the internet can bring many benefits to old people. Howerer, it is rare for old people to use them.
  In what ways do you think mobile phones and the internet can be useful to old people? What could be done to encourage old people to use these new technologies?
这道题的focus为benefits to old people. 对比 old ways of communication and entertainment VS modern ways ( internet and mobile phones)
针对老年人，他们有两个很明显的特点是能分别使得mobile phones and internet 很有用：
他们的lifestyle 中有do morning exercises。don't forget, as people are getting older, more likely they get injured if they fall. a mobile phone could possibly be used to save their lives when such an accident happens unexpectively.
is internet useful？ it is quite common that the young couples go to work on every week day and children also need to leave for school.in this case, many old people feel lonely because they can hardly find someone to talk to. obviously it would be a totally differnt story if the internet access is available and the seniors have learned how to make use of it. imagine how entertaining this is: you play cyber games such as Chinese chess against a rival at the other end of the world you don't even know who he or she is, or you chat online with many others who are willing to kill time. for these purposes, mobile phones can function as life-saving device and internet can be used to kill loneliness.
至于What could be done to encourage old people to use these new technologies?要知道，most old people have bad vision and it is pretty troublesome for them to learn new technologies.therefore, the keyboard should bear numbers bold enough(they can be seen easily) and handwriting should be introduced as a major way to input information. if possible, the biometric system such as voiceprint  ought to be invented  or introduced as   a good solution to switch on the hi-tech gadgets.basing on these methods mentioned above, i believe, far more aged over 65 will be enormously encouraged to use these new technologies.

模拟考官

3楼的blanket：你对比的感觉不错。 不知你的总体答题是否明确，与所举证的内容是否一致。没有直接答题扣分也是很重的。从你提供的信息中感觉不出你的答题立场。

blanket

老师，我写的是四段。focus是农业发展对human life and human health
因为赶时间，中英文夹带，希望老师可以帮忙看看..........

一段：带出问题。
food crisis seems to be 世界范围的严重问题。this is because食物的less choices 和 农业生产的低效率。this means 我们应该keep a close eye on 并且鼓励农业的developments，这不仅是为了一个人或者一个国家，but for worldwide.
二段：批反方。
那些认为农业不应该发展的人不对。因为食物的选择少让食物危机变得更加严重，且traditional ways 效率很低，不能有效地满足现在的large population 的需求； 那些认为不该发展的人，因为他们觉得传统农业生产出来的食物比较健康，但是现在环境问题那么严重，导致了soil的污染，所以也不见得有利人类健康。所以不发展这个notion is not the issue.
三段：批正方里不好的那面。
支持developments不代表说每个新发展都好。因为有些食物是转基因的（这里好像用错了个句子，写的是some new types  of fruits are made with the aim of modifying genes, 唉），对人类健康当然不好；然后工厂农业效率高，但是里面的contaminants  contribute a great deal to pollution；
四段：in conclusion。
总结说，虽然不是每一个新的发展都对人类life 有利，但是我们仍然应该鼓励农业中的新发展。同时，也应该持续关注着新的发展里面的minus side.

模拟考官

6楼的blanket：你的对比果然做得不错。现我来给你做较详细的点评。
body1的“因为食物的选择少让食物危机变得更加严重，且traditional ways 效率很低，不能有效地满足现在的large population 的需求；”属于explore;"因为他们觉得传统农业生产出来的食物比较健康，但是现在环境问题那么严重，导致了soil的污染，所以也不见得有利人类健康。所以不发展这个notion is not the issue."也不错，但不够specific.
body2的“因为有些食物是转基因的（这里好像用错了个句子，写的是some new types  of fruits are made with the aim of modifying genes, 唉），对人类健康当然不好”why?只有opinion,无specific evidence；“然后工厂农业效率高，但是里面的contaminants  contribute a great deal to pollution； ”有无进一步的解释啊？这么好的idea若没有支持就太可惜了。
你还有一个与许多考生相同的毛病：你采用two-sided的写法，可末段却讲不出道理来。“虽然不是每一个新的发展都对人类life 有利，但是我们仍然应该鼓励农业中的新发展。”why?
"同时，也应该持续关注着新的发展里面的minus side."--你的水平不至于写出这么空洞的话。你应该对提到的problems提出solutions, 并讲出点道理来，比如说：虽然不是每一个新的发展都对人类life 有利，但是我们仍然应该鼓励农业中的新发展，because feeding a hungrier world is absolutely more important, and as long as we pay close attention to the evironmental problems involved will we find appropriate measures to minimize them, although it's impossible to extinguish them.-----故coherence丢分。
从你少量的英语表达中看出你英语表达水平超6分。结论：得分6－6.5

blanket

谢谢老师，minus side没有具体的写，因为没有时间了啊。。。。。。。而且觉得前面写了它的负面影响了。。。。。

想顺便请教一个问题，，(老师会回答作文以外的吧)

712的听力，它念的是elevator,  如果用lift 代替能不能给一点分呢？

还有它念的好像是 sport equipment（绝对没s）  我写的是the sports equipment  ,这样算错吗 到底俩区别在哪。。。

模拟考官

blanket：what you need is a good dictionary.

gzcindy

请老师看看:
Modern technology is used in agriculture more and more widely in recent years.Some people support that while others not. Let me exam both views and give my own opinion.

On the one hand, I think it is necessary and important to use modern technologies in agriculture production. As we all know, in today's world, the population is keep on increasing while the farm land is decreasing at the same time, because of the citilization process. Consequently, in order to raise more people by less farm land, we must improve the efficiency of the agriculture production. It is modern technology that can help us to achieve the goal. Compare to traditional agriculture, modern agriculture, such as factory farming, can improve food production immensely. On the contrary, if we insisted on old agriculture method, many people in today's world would suffer from hungry.

On the other hand, there're also some drawbacks involved in the application of modern technology in agriculture, one of which is that the quality of the food may be influenced. We often heard people complain that the fruits, vegetables and meats are not as delicious as they used to be. Why is that?
Because modern agriculture uses many artificial methods to improve the production, which influence the tastes as well as the nutrition of the food. While traditionally, farmers grew fruits, vegetables and raised domestic animals in a natural way, the growth period is much longer than today's, and the tastes were better and the nutrition were developed fully.

In conclusion, application of modern technology is necessary because nothing is more important than to feed the increasing population in the world. While the quality of food is also an important problem which should, and l believe, can be resolved by agriculture scientists.

gzxdd

老师,可不可以点评一下7月12日G类的大作文..
Task 2:
In may places people are living older
-what the reasons for this
-how  the society can benefit from this valuable older people

谢谢

清凝

老师：关于您说d类型题要写出对比/比较关系这点，我还不是很明白，我看了许多写作书上给出的discuss类型题的范文，都用的是平衡式写法——分别陈述正反方观点，然后写自己观点在总结，也都没写出两种观点间的比较关系，而且剑桥上雅思考官写的范文好像也没这么写，关于这一点真的很puzzle，您能再解释清楚点吗？有些题目怎么去找对比和比较关系呢？谢谢您~

模拟考官

11楼的gzxdd：像这样的题目考到了就应该庆贺啊！
In may places people are living older
-what the reasons for this
-how  the society can benefit from this valuable older people
有什么好讲的呢？ body1:reasons; body2: benefits to society.注意一下benefits,是对society
的，而不是individuals或其它的。

gzxdd

谢谢老师的点评。。。。。即使是简评。。。。

我看过你之前的贴子。。。。你很强调TASK RESPONSE。。。。

请问就这篇作文来讲，是不是答了REASONS，和回答了SOCIETY如何 BENEFIT，
这个TASK RESPONSE的分数就有5分。。。？

等明天出了分数后，我回忆出来，让你点评一下我的作文。。。

模拟考官

14楼的gzxdd：好！先说好，你先不要将成绩告诉我，只将你的考试回忆写过来，最好有英语表达，然后我给你做详尽的讲解，之后我们来对一下答案，看是否是一样的分数，好吗？

gzxdd

对了。。。BODY1我大概是这样写的，

REASON1：
国家比以前大大改善人们的生活环境。。。。。。举了些例子，汽车尾气控制，化工厂数量的控制，还有实在想不起来了。。。。说这些大大改善了人们的生活居住环境，所以 living older  than before
REASON2：
个人比以前更注重自己的健康状态了。。。。。。举了些例子，注重体育锻炼，做YOGA这些可以益寿的SPORTS，还有实在想不起来了。。。。。这些可以使人们living older than before

请问老师,这样可不可以?

gzxdd

行,好的...

我到时把TASK1,TASH2的作文都用英文写出来,让老师点评.

不好意思...到时候可能老师要忍受一下我的作文了.............. n1 n1 n1

模拟考官

12楼的清凝，我记得你是英语专业的。现在的写作考题是有focus 和对比 的两个事物或找出两个事物之间的关系的，你说剑桥真题1－6没有？你最好参考剑5、6，那些题目代表现在的考试趋势。我还真看不出哪道不需对比。至于其它书籍，你还是不看为宜，所有那些书早就被labelled: 7分不宜。我说所有！那些作者自己去考都不一定能拿7分。而且一考他们全都不敢出书了。

blanket

老师，我作文考了7分 。
谢谢老师了！

grace5602

老师您好,看了上面同学的帖子,我感觉我写跑题了.下面是我的写作OUTLINE,您看看.
第一段,说农业发展的现象
第二段,先反写,有些人认为不应该把钱放在发展农业上,而应该是教育,医疗,等等
第三段,正说,发展新农业的好处.满足人口膨胀问题所导致的粮食危机,提高生活质量,让人们尝到新的东西.
第四段,总结,应该鼓励发展新农业,让我们的生活更colorful,提高生活质量
感觉大家都是在围绕传统农业和新农业在写,但我写的是把钱投在其他地方和发展农业,老师这样写是不是跑题了,能得几分呢